The Weird Thing
Jack was
playing in the garden with his sister Mary.
They were digging to try to get to the other side of the world, but not
for long. They had found a huge piece of metal that wouldn’t chip, so they dug
around it. Eventually they found a lid! What was it? They tried to guess what
it was but their guess was nothing like it. Mary wanted to open it so much that
Jack let her. But when she lifted the lid… it was like nothing she’d seen
before. They climbed down into it. There were many rooms and also some kind of
evil creature.
By Matthew O Yr6
That's not fair! I want to know what the creature was! :-) Great writing, Matthew.
ReplyDeleteMatthew, this sounds like a great beginning for a video game! You used description to put a picture in the reader's head. Sentence fluency and mystery make your story smooth, engaging and enjoyable to read. The ending made me wonder what will happen next. Nice job!
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