100 Words - Hansel and Gretel
Once upon a time, on the edge of the forest lived two
children named Hansel and Gretel. They lived with their kind-hearted father and
their wicked step-mother. At dawn their step-mother told them to get some wood.
They came across a peculiar house; from gummy-bears to lollypops – the house
was coated from head to toe in sugar. They crept into the dreamy house. But to
their dismay they found a crinkled hag bending over a giant pizza oven. As they
went to push the hag into the oven, she moved out the way and they fell in,
resulting in death.
Well done on this 100 Word Challenge Leah and Josie. What a dark ending! You have structured your sentences well and I like the adjectives you chose to add interest to your story, particularly the idea of a 'dreamy house' :) Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteJu - Team 100, Sheffield, South Yorkshire
Good story. I liked it!
ReplyDeleteAwesome story guys!!!!
ReplyDeleteCool story. I love the way you have described the sugar-coated house.
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ReplyDeleteI love your story Josie and Leah. Especially the part when they go to push her in the oven and she moved out of the way. Keep writing more awesome stories!
ReplyDeleteI love the story keep it up and why not try writing a nother one love reading them cant wait to read the next
ReplyDeleteGreat story I love it.
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