It was the hottest day of the month. Jodie wanted to walk
up a mountain; she had never walked up one in her life, also her grandma had
just arrived and she thought it would be pleasant to have a family walk on a
nice sunny day. So they suggested they would walk up Cat Bells. But then Jodie
shouted, “Look up! Can you see?” Everyone
was astonished. But what was the thing?
It had red lights and a blue light on the top of it. “Run everyone!” It was a
bad idea! What will happen…will they live or die?
By Millie Yr6
I really like your story, Millie. I like the good quality use of the word 'astonished'. What did they see?
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ReplyDeleteI liked reading you 100Wc story, although you leave your reader wanting more! I like the background information you give about the weather and Jodie never walking up a mountain as well, it adds to your story.
Well done!
Laura A, team100, Luxembourg
Thank you
ReplyDeleteThey saw an alien ship.
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