Thursday, 4 October 2012


The Blood Thirsty Blitz!

I am lying on my living room floor,
I am looking at the wall but where’s the door?
I am feeling the breeze of the Earth’s core,
I am in the middle of an immense war.

The sky is as red as blood,
The ground is covered in sloppy brown mud,
The fire is roaring like a lion,
The houses are steaming like an iron,
The bombs exploding,
Machine guns re-loading,
They are willing,
That they will be killing,
Lots of folk,
Gathered under the smoke,
They are destroying the city,
They will be saying “Oh what a pity.”

Now it’s a brand new city,
It will always be pretty.
We’ll keep it in our sight and let it shine under the moonlight.


By Lucy K (Yr6)                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               

6 comments:

  1. hi i really like you poem it is very moving

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  2. I think it's really good to Holly - I'm very proud of Lucy!

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  3. EnvironmentalCookie4 October 2012 at 20:32

    It is Brilliant and its moving. She rhymed in it aswell which is really hard to do. <3

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    1. Thank you, rhyming is alot easier than it looks, wants u get a rhyme in your head you have to write it down straight away.To have a perfect poem you have to think about how you want your reader to feel for me thats a piece of cake!!

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    2. EnvironmentalCookie5 October 2012 at 16:31

      It must be for you because when I try to rhyme it never happens.

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  4. this is really touching

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