Friday, 8 February 2013

The start of a story that Grace is writing:

Rihanna loved just sitting on the side of the quiet little cove. She adored sketching the picturesque landscape and much of the wildlife. One day whilst she was sketching, Rihanna noticed a ripple. Not the size a fish would make but slightly bigger. At first she just ignored it. But it seemed to hypnotise her, draw her in. Closer and closer she got until her head was underwater. In the murky depths she could just make out a giant fish. With red hair? And only half of it was a fish? Rihanna fell back.                                            
"A mermaid!" she murmured in astonishment. "It can't be!"
Rihanna ducked her head back under. She could see the tail but not the body. Where was it? Before she knew what was happening, Rihanna was dragged under. Down and down she went. Past the kelp forest, past the floating rocks. Rihanna’s lungs were fit to burst.
They were talking to her; telling her, "Breath, breath, breath!"
"Sweet air; give me, feed me sweet air!"
Her eyes were going to pop out of her skull. Rihanna breathed deeply…
By Grace (Yr6) 

4 comments:

  1. Katie the Tattie8 February 2013 at 16:50

    Great work so far Grace!!!!!! Can't wait for the rest to come out.

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  2. Well done Grace I loved this writing you should enter the 500 word story.

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  3. GOOD WORK GRACEY WELL DONE.I CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART OF YOUR STORY TO BE PUBLISHED. AND I HOPE YOU PUT SOME MORE FANTASTICK STORIES ON THE BLOG WILL YOU? BECAUSE YOU ARE A FANTASTICK WRITER AND GOOD LUCK WITH YOUR 500 WORDS STORY!!!

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  4. EnvironmentalCookie22 February 2013 at 18:54

    Brilliant! Forbes you have written a AMAZING piece of writing, more of this please! (I want to know what happens next!;)) Thankyou For this!

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